Advanced Writing: A Sample Essay For Inspiration & Mimicking

Opinion A. I am glad to see that the person is sharing my point of view about the best advertisement. It is interesting to know that the author has also noticed the volume of the advertisement, which is obviously an important aspect. The text is really large enough and contains the most necessary information but doesn’t become too long and boring. The author has shrewdly noticed that the advertisement follows the recommendations in the video lecture, by offering the employees the opportunities they will enjoy in that company. As for the worst advertisement, I cannot agree that David’s Bridal advertisement is so bad, but it is surely insufficient. Besides, the author mentions that he/she knows a person with real work experience in that organization, and it turns out that the work doesn’t coincide with the first impression. By the way, I like the picture itself but I don’t think it is a good idea for a job advertisement; it is rather a shop commercial or a film poster. Thus, I would like to agree with the author that the advertisement of David’s Bridal needs further improvement.
Opinion B. The author considers the Mortgage Underwriter to be the worst advertisement. I can fully agree with the author, it is really a very ineffective text, which would hardly attract any candidate. There is no person who would get interested in the job where he/she knows only his/her duties and finds no positive stimulations or advantages. However, the requirements mentioned are quite full and sufficient, the advertisement needs only to be expanded and include more points and aspects, and then it will become a good and interesting job offer for candidates. As for the choice of the best advertisement, I cannot agree with the author that it is the best offer for job seekers. First of all, an experienced specialist knows his/her duties and responsibilities well enough, so the employers needn’t write them once again. Besides, the advertisement contains too much text, which can be easily reduced to the most important points. Moreover, the contact information should be provided – a phone number and/or email, since website form is not the best way to contact the employer, to my mind. Thus, although it is a very big and detailed advertisement, I don’t consider it to be the best one, unlike the author, and would recommend consideration and reduction.