Introduction
The presentation of our case and the platforms we chose to apply were of importance to the failure or success of our bid to have our case heard as workers of Quay hotel. Therefore, the presentation was drafted with great care in an attempt at addressing all the issues raised in the group meeting notes. However, there were areas that on foresight should have been improved upon to maximize the intended impact of the presentation.
Strengths of the presentation
The presentation articulated our stand and feelings on all areas we had grievances on such as salary increment plans and working conditions provisions. The presentation held more weight since it was supported by legislation by quoting the (HELPFU) agreement. The use of legislation to back our demand lends the argument more weight as the employer felt more obligated to meet the demands, not for our interest but in compliance with the law
Weaknesses of our argument
Our argument however was not without a few hiccups here and there. The use of language and the tone employed during the negotiations did not portray a deep-rooted intent on actualizing changes in the work place. The use of words such as ‘should’ in outlining the obligations of the employer did not send a message of real intent. Another case in point, where we presented the argument for training, the following statement is employed, ‘where the senior employees may be taken for training and orientation on management and leadership skills.’ use of such language gives the management the impression of having a choice in the matter which hinders the chances of the issue raised being addressed. (Toler 2009: 67)
Changes made if the presentation were to be done again
The flow of the presentation would have to be revised in order to achieve an effective method of communication that passes the points raised home. The use of an essay format to the presentation document was a little misinformed and that would be changed appropriately to a report documenting our group findings in a coherent manner. This would follow distinct heading for each issue addressed and the proposed solution after problem statement. This format will have greater impact than the previously employed one by avoiding a mixture in ideas presented in the paper.
Bibliography
Toler, S. (2009). Stan Toler's practical guide to hiring staff: How to recruit and retain an effective ministry team. Indianapolis, Ind: Wesleyan Pub. House.
