Discussion Board Question on Writing Two
First, read chapters 31 and 32 of A Pocket Style Manual. Then, revise each of the five sentences below so they follow all of the instructions of integrating and citing quotations mentioned in those chapters. These are copied and pasted from actual student essays written in this course. You should re-type each sentence directly into your post or into a separate document you attach to your post as a PDF. This time, I will be grading your correctness to make sure you understand what the PSM says about citation.
1. On page 59 in the story, you see Vollmer do just that. "In a lineup of possible Nazis I would not have chosen this man--a fact that probably reveals my own naïve, preconceived notions about Nazis and their permutations.
As the story develops, Vollmer admits his wide-eyed and naïve image of the Nazis: "In a lineup of possible Nazis I would not have chosen this man” (59).
2. Im guessing most women that have given birth have had a similar experience to Angela's"So I decided that with each contraction I would scream every bad word I knew. Bitch, motherfucker! I didn’t care what anyone said, not Patrick, not my mother, not even the nuns" (Morales, 179).
Through her character’s experience, Morales gives a good description of what most women that have given birth would remember: "So I decided that with each contraction I would scream every bad word I knew. Bitch, motherfucker! I didn’t care what anyone said, not Patrick, not my mother, not even the nuns" (179).
3. Ballentine wrote a very negative essay and constantly used sayings that brought the mood down, such as, "Drowning in his sorrows." (1)
4. I would say that any story has to involve a character whom at some point struggles with hardship, one that evolves into something better than they were before. See the following quote in Sometimes a Romantic Notion. "I headed out, in actually, to the beginning of my circus career. I stayed 10 years. That first day I earned about $2, and it was harder than brick washing. My last day, just shy of my 28th birthday, I declined a contract guaranteeing me 6 figures over 10 months where I would work a total of 16 minutes a day”(Schmitt35).
I would say that any story has to involve a character who struggles with hardship at some point, one that evolves into something better than they were before. Schmitt’s story from ‘Sometimes a Romantic Notion’ shows an example of such a character:
I headed out, in actually, to the beginning of my circus career. I stayed 10 years. That first day I earned about $2, and it was harder than brick washing. My last day, just shy of my 28th birthday, I declined a contract guaranteeing me 6 figures over 10 months where I would work a total of 16 minutes a day (35).
5. Veselka says "I spent a week on the road in Appalachia, visiting truck stops, interviewing old truckers and waitresses "(Best American Essays 52).
In the story, Veselka shares the experience of travelling in Appalachia, “visiting truck stops, interviewing old truckers and waitresses "(52).
