Essay One Peer Review and Critique
The draft written by Asia Smith was actually found to be in conformity to the guidelines that was stipulated in the instructions. Specifically, the strengths that were evident are as follows: (1) it described the composing process, with specific reference to the writing experience on the research paper on abortion; and (2) the draft also provided specific responses to the questions – how do you write and why do you write this way?. With regards to describing the composing process, Asia was able to provide details which included defining the appropriate situation or environment that was deemed conducive to writing. Next, the author have effectively enumerated the steps learned during the writing process which included: (1) determining the instructions; (2) brainstorming; (3) identifying the topic for the essay; (3) gathering information; (4) selecting which from the information that was gathered could be put into effective use in the essay; and (5) reviewing and proofreading. As such, the responses aptly addressed the identified questions which were specifically stated in the detailed instructions: how do you write (in complete silence; while sitting at the kitchen table; and has to be late at night) and why do you write this way (to be focused; to avoid the bed and might eventually end up sleeping; and since the author is accustomed to staying up late due to being on night shift).
On the contrary, the draft could still be improved as the following weaknesses were noted: (1) while explaining the writing process, the author had some tendencies of repeating and going around as the process of following the instructions, brainstorming, and selecting the most appropriate topic to write. For instance, the author indicated that she has already indicated the need to pick the topic and brainstorming in the first sentence of the third paragraph; yet, she repeated the same argument in the third sentence of the same paragraph. Therefore, to improve on this, the author could have said cited some of the brainstorming ideas which she has noted after selecting the topic on abortion through indicating in the third sentence that: ‘among the brainstorming ideas which could be used are: what are the pros and cons of abortion; what are the effects; who are most affected; what are the current statistics on abortion; to name a few’. Overall, one strongly believes that the author has effectively adhered to the requirements of the essay; but could still improve the writing style, as suggested.
