Critical Summary of “The Heroic Journey of Snow White”
Taking Marius’ qualities and the original peer review, as copied and pasted into the aforementioned document, it becomes obvious that the writer has done an exceptional job overall, meeting the length requirement and fitting the assignment in terms of interacting the major Campbell's theories with the movie itself.
In detail, the writer has indeed chosen a catchy title that does not bore readers and tells much about the content, inviting readers to further read. With the use of solid evidence, the writer has managed to make a clear connection between Campbell’s theories and the movie itself by including much factual information and providing specific examples to support his stance, allowing his readers to have a deeper understanding of his piece of writing.
Introduction was to the point, even though the writer seems to be getting right to the point a bit swiftly; however, adding some minor information to the introduction could solve this minor drawback. Additionally, the writer achieved to pass on to his readers a good reason to read his work, with the particular word usage such as “ravishing” and “stunning” and by presenting facts of the movie that both drive readers to continue reading.
Based on Marius’ claim that a good essay stays with its subject, the essay was indeed focused and well-organized round the subject. Also, transitions between ideas were made smoothly from beginning to end, enriched with interesting facts.
The writer also interpreted Campbell’s quotations sufficiently and successfully linked Campbell’s ideas to the content. For example, in the first paragraph of the main body the writer included one of Campbell’s theories, “The first stage is leaving where you are, whatever the environment. You may leave because the environment is too repressive and you are consciously uneasy and eager to leave”, and even though it would be more preferable to use quotation marks to make it easier for the readers to realize it was Campbell’s theory the writer had written at that part of his paper, he actually managed to give a solid interpretation of what represented repressiveness and what is the starting point of and call for adventure.
When it comes to grammatical error, I realized there were some tense-formation issues in some parts of the paper. For example, the writer wrote “her attempts was successful”, when there should be “her attempts were successful”, and “Snow White then enter” instead of “Snow White then enters”. Other than that, there were no major grammar errors found in the writing.
Conclusion was rather abrupt and did not mirror the beginning or formed as a summary of what was aforementioned, as supposed. Alternatively, the writer could include more relevant quotes and make writing easier.
Finally, since the paper makes a thoughtful response to the assignment, which was to connect Campbell’s theories to the Snow White movie, it deserves an A. What is more, the content was not too dense or too packed, but allowed readers to follow the writer throughout the paper, without any problems or feeling that they are being bombarded with information they cannot cope with. The writer makes his point in every paragraph in a simple and effective way and uses an engaging introduction to rise the appetite of his readers to read more. Transitions from one idea to another are smooth, while his paper is well-organized with no major grammar or punctuation errors.
