Essay On Informational Argument

The introduction draws the reader into the topic effectively. It clearly shows what the writer is going to discuss by giving a general outline yet leaving the suspense to read and find out what the writing expands more. The introduction can be improved by replacing the opening sentence with a more capturing statement that directly states the topic of discussion which in this case, is the U.S – Mexico border.
The writer is neutral. From the beginning to the end, he/ she do not give her stand but that of the public. She has maintained that stand to the end. Her focus is well visible as she has given both the pros and cons of the border and in so doing, repeatedly stated that to be the stand of the U.S and Mexican citizens.
There are some instances of wordiness in the second paragraph. In talking about how the border creates job the write is not clear. They should write in the following way
- The border also creates employment opportunities. This is not only to the constructors but also guards who ensure no one is crossing over.
The highlighted part in the third paragraph also needs similar revision. The writer should also have given more information on the border Bill.
The conclusion is effective as it is. It requires no major changes at except the withdrawal of the last sentences. This will create a suspense that will make the reader want to research more about the impacts of the border to the US and Mexican citizen and how the relationship between the two countries will be affected. It wraps the whole discussion appropriately by highlighting the major points in both sides of the discussion. It however leaves the reader with the need to know more about the topic and more on its effects.