Example Of Research Paper On Peer Reply 1

- Regardless of their attributes and potential, all students in today’s society seem to be excessively encouraged to pursue a bachelor’s degree, even when it might mean the risk of debt, unemployment, and disappointment. The thesis is more of a general suggestion than a question; it is not very definitive, and does not provide a solution to the problem.
- The writer does not offer a preview of the main supporting topics, which I think it would benefit from, to show where the paper will go.
- The introduction has a good sense of information comparing expectations of college success with its statistical failures.
- The purpose of the paper is not clear by the end of the introduction; there is an argument in the thesis as to the existence of the problem, but not of any solutions.
- The introduction is adequately written to give the reader an interest in the expectations of college experiences as opposed to their reality.
- Some citations and more specific information could be given to support the assertions about cultural attitudes re: college experiences in the introduction.
- Each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- The sentences do support the thesis statement, being a clear extension of the main argument. Improvements include foreshadowing them a bit in the introduction.
- The paragraphs are appropriately supported with authoritative opinions and statistics from reputable sources (whose reputation is often cited in the paragraph).
- The placement of outside evidence is always given appropriate context, but often the citations are missing years or page numbers.
- In-text citations do not have years or page numbers, and the Smerciak citation is often confusedly done, as part of Kavilanz’ source. All of the sources are found on the Works Cited page.
- Each body paragraph has a decent concluding sentence that ties up the supporting topic and brings it back to the thesis.
- The body paragraph about community colleges offers a good potential solution that follows from the paper analysis.
- The arguments the writer makes mostly revolve around the debunking of assumptions and myths about college attendance that are not supported or cited.
- There is a very clear flow to the paragraphs of the essay, moving from college assumptions to the reality of college prospects to the prospect of alternatives.
- The thought process behind each paragraph felt natural and progressive.
- Transitions were perfectly understandable.
- The information in the body paragraphs is fairly well organized as well and coherent, transitioning between pieces of information and their significance.
- The conclusion is adequate for summing up the argument from the introduction, but does not tie in very closely with the introduction itself; the thesis and concluding arguments do not strictly match up.
- The concluding paragraph does, however, sum up all of the supporting paragraph’s arguments in each subsequent sentence.
- The conclusion offers a strong image for students in “mounds of debt” and the prospects for them to consider alternatives to college.
- The Works Cited page seems to be correct.
- The essay is very strong in organizing its information and presenting clear arguments in the body paragraphs
- The essay could use a more complete argument in its intro and conclusion.
- The in-text citations are done correctly since most of their sources are online, but online sources for journal articles still need a page number if you are reading a publishable version of it.
- Each in-text citation is on the Works Cited page.
- The Works Cited page is in the correct format.