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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RAaLwwsu7VM
My classmates response:
RE: Reduce Cell Phone Use
Mackenzie Your power point was very impression, there is a lot of different things on each slide. I could not pull up the youtube video so I can not really comment on that. I do believe your power point did list all the important topics about the cell phone usage. It is a topic that hits home to a lot of people. We all know someone who has been involved in an incident with cell phone weather it is driving or health issues. You did have alot of good points to your speech that you listed on your power point.
RE: Reduce Cell Phone Use
I believe one of your biggest strengths in this speech was your use of questioning. Although your questions were rhetorical, they were successful in encouraging me to stop and think about possible responses. Questions keep an audience interested in your topic and make your speech sound more like a conversation than a lecture. Not only were your questions engaging, using statistics from Kent State University helped you relate your topic to the audience. Speakers who can relate a topic to their audience will be more successful in persuading people to agree with their position or take a specific action. You mentioned in your introduction that you've personally had an experience where your cell phone has hurt a social relationship and distracted you from everyday activities. I think it would add to your credibility if you were to share one of these experiences. Sharing personal stories will show the audience you are competent to speak about this topic increasing the possibility for persuasion.
RE: Reduce Cell Phone Use
This was a very strong speech that encompassed personal experiences that related to research and statistics. I think mentioning your experience of being distracted and being hurt in a social relationship because of phone usage was something many people could identify with. I also believe the speech flowed well and you really engaged with the audience through rhetorical questions that made the audience stop and think about their own phone usage. I thought your use of hand movements was also really well timed and showed your interest in the topic. You mentioned research about students and study that related well to the targeted audience. Including some counter arguments to your research and then debunking these arguments would have made your arguments a little bit more conclusive.
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Persuasive Speech of Kyle Rohr - Eliminate Texting While Driving
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IWMbukpQ5lk
My classmates response:
RE: Eliminate Texting While Driving
Effective delivery of this speech, as it was a good idea to start out with a question. You engaged your audience in a way that they could relate, and you had also informed them on a subject that will grab their attention. The people who are listening to your speech should be able to understand your reason for telling them about your experience, and you were able to tell them what they needed to know with the information that you had about texting while driving. The flow of the speech and the tone both worked well, and while speaking you could bring interesting facts into your speech. You kept the audience interested by adding the information about the dangers, and gave them a reason to keep listening and to learn from the speech the lesson that you are trying to get across to them.
RE: Eliminate Texting While Driving
Kyle your speech was very informative and the statistic are true. There are so many accidents because of people texting while driving. I have to admit when something comes over my text and I need to respond I have used my text to talk. There has been issues with the way the text to talk does not get all my wording right and the person will text back and say what did you say so I just do not do that. Your speech was great and you did a good job getting the information across. I think your note cards looked professional.
RE: Eliminate Texting While Driving
I would have to say that your biggest strength was your use of ethos, logos, and pathos. You started off by noting your experience with a car car crash, which points to your familiarity with the subject. It made me feel as though I could trust what you were going to say. You used statistics and facts to relate to the rational side of my brain. It was very interesting that you noted that texting and driving impairs visual, cognitive, and hands on attention. I have never thought of it this way. Lastly, you used pathos to instill fear in me. 3000 die each year as a result? Worse than drunk driving? These are things I tend to dismiss, but they showed me just how serious this topic is.
I think that you could strengthen the speech with your nonverbal delivery. Your voice tends to seem a bit monotone. Try using different pitch to add enthusiasm to your voice. It will make you seem more passionate and will engage the audience.
Other than that, fantastic speech.
RE: Eliminate Texting While Driving
The start of your speech was excellent at gaining the attention of the audience because the examples you gave could affect our own lives and people around us. It was backed up by good research with the 2012 article ‘Distracting Driving’. The use of statistics really supported your argument and convinced the audience to change their behavior. You used non verbal communication well and moved around the room but it looked just a little rigid and some more relaxed movement could have engaged the audience a little more. I also thought a little bit more variation in tone and some rhetorical questions could have improved your speech. I thought the solutions were a really good part of your speech and your mention of how 5 seconds could change your life also made me question my own behavior. Overall a good speech.
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Persuasive Speech of Nicole Dublo - Eating Healthy
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jPauDMZwzO0
My classmates response:
RE: Eating Healthy
I think that your biggest strength was relating the topic to the audience. We as college students have all heard of the "freshman 15" and you noted on how to handle this problem the way a college student should. By noting of meal plans and the stress of time, you fully captured what we as student face on a day to day basis. The fact that I could relate to this topic made me feel very focused and engaged because you offered solutions to the growing problem of eating unhealthy.
Thus, I like the idea that you not only presented the topic, but also solutions to the problem.
I think that your biggest weakness was that you read straight off of the paper your entire speech. By doing this, you eliminated any chance for eye contact. It is important to note that these speeches are supposed to be extemporaneous and conversation-like. Try practicing your speech without the paper next time and your audience will be more engaged and interested.
RE: Eating Healthy
One of your biggest strengths in your persuasive speech was your logos, or evidence and reasoning. Your oral citations throughout your speech were successful in supporting the information you presented. When you orally cite your sources during your speech, your audience is aware you are explaining important evidence which will trigger their interest and increase your success in persuading your audience. I would suggest you to implement nonverbal communication into this speech. I believe the use of gestures could help you emphasize the evidence in your speech and add to the enthusiasm about your topic. Gestures can also carry meanings in themselves.
RE: Eating Healthy
RE: Eating Healthy
The speech was really well directed towards the audience of college students. I thought that research was supported by simple solutions that can stop obesity. For example you mentioned eating fruit instead other snacks that are bad for you. You also mentioned simple solutions like dividing the plate into 4 with protein, carbohydrates, vegetables and fruit. The start of the speech shocked the audience and was a good way to get people listening. The most obvious improvement to the speech would be to use more non verbal communication like hand movements and moving around a little bit. You could read off the page a little less and use more eye contact as well. This was still a well researched speech that had practical solutions to the problems of obesity research.
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Persuasive Speech of Jenny McGregor - Endangered Beetle
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RYp47DEdFfc
RE: Persuasive Speech - Endangered Beetle
Jenny I thought your speech was very informative, I would have never thought about that topic. I had no Idea that the beetle were endangered. I did learn that the website for US fish and game has an extreme amount of information about different endangered species and I would have not know about this if it was not for your speech. You did a good job with presenting your information and your eye contact was great. Your note cards look profession and you stayed in the frame of the web cam. Over all I think you did a great job.
RE: Persuasive Speech - Endangered Beetle
I like how you had all of the information accessible that was found from the research available for the speech, because it was effective towards presenting it in a way that can be well understood. You talked about the importance of saving the beadle and you were able to inform us on the true danger that it is in. You did well at connecting with your audience by telling them how much of a negative effect that an extinction of an entire species can have on an ecosystem. The way that you spoke in this speech was useful because you spoke with the kind of seriousness that is needed for informing a group of people on this kind of a subject. You let them know about the help that they could make for this cause to solve the problem that may be happening near them, and you were effective at encouraging people to do something about it.
RE: Persuasive Speech - Endangered Beetle
RE: Persuasive Speech - Endangered Beetle
I liked how you took what looks like a small topic and gave an informative speech about the importance of this little beetle for all of us. I also enjoyed your mentioning of the larger picture of the endangered species. For example it will result in more pests and less scientific research that plays a part in our lives. I think that the speech could have engaged with the audience a little more by using more hand movements and maybe giving some statistics that would shock the audience. There were some really though provoking lines in this speech such as “If mankind continues to let species perish then when does their peril become ours”? This has to make anyone think. Perhaps a pause around such great line would really bring the seriousness of the topic home to the audience.
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