While taking writing class that requires a paper, errors emerge. However, it is a learning opportunity to be able to identify the errors by oneself just so it is a learning process when the student can be able to identify the mistakes and seek a solution for them. While identifying the errors, it is advisable to classify them under grammatical mistakes and rank them in different categories.
The learner should be able to each issue and styles that constitutes the grammatical errors. For instance, arrangement of words influences the sentence stricture that either make the sentence too long to comprehend or senseless or sometimes just out of context. In this paper, I will use my first paper mistakes to highlight major errors and try to offer solution or corrections to the errors.
In the first paper, on the first page second paragraph, comma was conspicuously missing. A conitional clause requires a comma. The addition of comma in the sentence would fix the clause. Omission was also realized on the third page. On the last paragraph of the same page, a comma was inaccurately used. The underling of the title of the first page was also necessary. Underlining the title statement creates a sense of stress and emphasis on the title as it carries the theme of the whole paper.
Introduction and thesis
Despite setting a clear and precise introduction, the introduction should have included a close tie with the topic on the topic sentence. It makes the connection between the introductory paragraph and the title of the paper. It also creates a sense of unity of purpose with the title. The introduction gives a clear direction and opening to the thesis statement.
Organization
In page four of the first paper, the paragraphs are overloaded with the information. It should have been separated into two paragraphs to create two distinct ideas that are interconnected. The overloading of paragraph results into redundancy. The main idea is slightly brushed though the key them in the already loaded paragraph. However, the interchange of paragraphs and was efficient throughout the paper with a connection of thoughts in a sequential way from one paragraph to another with well-developed and supported ideas. For example, each instance was closely connected to the claim by supportive evidence and examples.
Support and evidence
The claims laid in the writing in the first papers were clearly supported by evidences. For instance on page four of the paper, I made claims o how Junior managed to blend in the new school that is pre-dominantly white. Despite being Asian, Junior joins the basketball team and actually gets a while girlfriend. These instances from the reading prove how the claims I raised were supported.(4)
Audience and Conclusion.
The paper was on target considering the audience. It was written to the students in a school set up who might be experiencing difficulties in trying to accept their differences resulting from racial background, gender, or social status in the society. It also shows how this form of differences might cause unstable settlement of students in school due to fear of victimization or feeling f inadequacy. The conclusion of the paper was adequate reinstating the points in the entire paper and making a precise stand on the issue. In addition, a citation of the paper followed the conclusion showing that I understood where my sources originated from and how they were relevant to my thesis and the entire writing.
Works Cited
Alexi, Sherman “The Absolutely True Dairy of a Part Time Indian, New” York. 2007.
