Who is the author of this essay?
What is the title of this essay? 21 Years Male (no title)
What is the main idea?
The narrator spent his life savings on a trip to Europe to see his girlfriend and to travel.
Does this essay have:
An Introduction? How is it effective at getting the reader's attention? If it's not effective, give the author a suggestion on how it could be improved.
Yes, the introduction promises an interesting story.
A description of events that led up to a specific incident? A turning point? A reflection on that particular experience?
The description of events is, so far, interesting and readable. However, I think this piece is unfinished as there is no turning point so far.
A conclusion? How does it sum up the main point or fit with the theme of the memoir? Is it effective? Why or why not?
No, there is no conclusion so far. The piece still needs to be finished as it seems to end half way through the story.
Evaluate the essay for ethos, pathos, and logos. How does each play a role? How are the tactics used effectively?
This piece contains strong use of ethos, as the narrator comes across as honest and capable of telling his story. However, there is not much evidence of pathos of logos.
Is the essay complete or does it need considerable expansion? What points need development, if any?
This essay needs considerable expansion. As it is, it ends half way through the story. There does not seem to be a turning point or a conclusion yet.
Grammar: Does the essay have any of the following? (Please respond with a "yes" or "no." There's no need to correct the grammar.)
Incomplete sentences? Yes
Run-on sentences? Yes
Missing articles (a, an, the)? Yes
Problems with verb tenses? Yes
Spelling errors? No
Write two things that you think the author did well.
The author brings the European countries to life with examples of well-known attractions and activities that the narrator visited while there. Also, the author gives a clear picture of the narrator’s situation and relationship with his girlfriend and family.
Write two things that you think the author could improve.
Mainly, the piece needs to be finished. It needs a clear turning point and conclusion. Also, the language needs considerable editing, particularly in terms of grammar.
