Free Essay On Revision Worksheet

In Essay 2, you will make use of self-critique, peer review, and instructor feedback to revise your first essay. A portion of your grade on this essay, as well as on Essays 3 and 4, will be based on your ability to demonstrate significant revision of your work. You must submit a description of the revision process, including the sources of feedback you used and a description of the revisions you made to address the concerns raised by your reviewers.
Self-critique: What did you want to change/revise about the original paper? Be specific about any “re-visioning” you did. Where is this evident in the changes you made to the original?
I wanted, personally, to be more clear in my examples. I noticed that I can be very vague in the use of my examples, like when I described the Domino Effect. I needed to elaborate on that more.
Peer Review: What did the peer comments on your paper tell you? What feedback did you find useful? How did you address their concerns in your revision process? Be specific with details.
Mostly they said that my sentences were sometimes hard to follow. I had to go back and read through the essay, and I found that I practically rewrote the whole thing. I would either break them up or use commas in proper places to make them better and more readable. It gave me a good lesson on how to write better.
The best feedback from the instructor was to rewrite my thesis statement. I noticed that some of the things I was discussing did not relate to my thesis statement at all. So I went to rewrite the thesis statement, which made the whole paper flow a lot better.
Summary of the Revision Process: What process did you use for revising your essay? What did you do differently from drafting your original? What sections of the essay did you revise: introduction, thesis, key points, examples given, development of points, summary, restatement of thesis, and/or conclusion?
I essentially revised the whole paper. I felt that I can do a lot better on it, so everything on the paper was revised – from the way I wrote my sentences to the way I addressed the examples I have used. I did not actually change my examples – it’s just that I thought I could have done a much better job with writing this paper.