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Introduction:
This paragraph introduces the reader to the topic. The article titled “Improving Performance in Groups: Effects of Two Different Goal-Setting Strategies and Feedback on Brainstorming Performance” starts off with a comparison between teamwork and individual work. The advantages of teamwork come across clearly and the reader is able to relate to the author’s point of view. However, the sentence construction could be more refined and simpler.
There is a lot of good content and various sources have been provided to the reader if she/he wants to read up on the topic further. Providing links to these works would help the cause of the writer further. The paragraph structure could use more order, as that would only help the reader understand the comparison better. The use of grammar is errorless.
Goal-Setting:
Similar to the introduction paragraph, the section on goal setting is very informative. The writer does a good job of articulating the importance of goal setting, even to someone new to the concept. After reading this section, the readers would be convinced to use goal setting in their individual and team work endeavors. The writer cites a lot of works to educate the reader about the effects of teamwork. But if these effects are explained in depth by the writer, the article would have more weightage. The article is lacking real life scenarios which would further help the writer relate to the premise.
Goal Setting and feedback:
This section explains to us how the methods of goal setting and feedback are both used for similar purposes but at the same time are different from each other. The paragraph has excellent structure which is easily to follow and understand. The presence of hypothesis helps the reader relate to the topic clearly.
Feedback:
The paragraph on the technique of feedback is well written. However the beginning of paragraphs using “second, “third” and “forth” can be avoided. The sentences in the section are much simpler and coherent. The use of grammar is perfect and there are no run on sentences. This is the best written section of the article. Overall, this article serves well rounded guide to anyone looking to learn about goal setting and feedback practices.
Reference:
Eisele,Per. (2012-2013). Improving Performance in Groups: Effects of Two Different Goal-Setting Strategies and Feedback on Brainstorming Performance. Baltic journal of Psychology (45-57)
Introduction (45-46), Feedback (46-47), Goal Setting (49)
(Baltic journal of Psychology)
