Peer reviewer’s name:
Peer’s: name: Klarika K. Irons
One Essay:
After reviewing the works accomplished by my peer Klarika K. Irons, I wanted to read more deeply the reflection essay, titled as “You must, #reflect”. What has grabbed my attention and made we read it in the end was the title, which is very unusual, and the essence of the essay. After all, these are personal reflections about one’s life and career, which I am always eager to read. Moreover, there are eye-catching pictures in the essay which let me suppose that they can serve as illustrations for some ideas in the paper.
I suppose, such inner reflection is necessary for each person, who is in doubts about his/her career choice. I can see from the essay that the author was in two minds before writing the paper and speculated whether a legal field was really what she needed. Thus, this essay must help her in her career field, as far as I am concerned.
List 2-3 improvements that would have enhanced this essay:
The second paragraph about a leader is not very clear as the part of the essay. I think, the author should add some logical connectors to introduce the topic of heroism gradually.
The essay starts with a participle, which I don’t consider a very good beginning variant. Since introduction is one of the strongest points, it should have an effective start.
Brochure
After reviewing the brochure, what stood out in terms of its:
Research: the research is presented as the quotation of a famous person in the legal sphere and the statistical data about inmates, which, however, does not have any source or reference.
Graphics: there are a few pictures of imprisoned and sentenced people and general photo related to justice and court.
Layout: The layout is very simple; the photos have different sizes, which is not very good. Besides, the text is very homogeneous in style, and nothing catches attention.
In what ways would this brochure inspire others to major in this area?
The quotation of Alberto Gonzales serves as a good motivation, which can stimulate one to defend justice.
Photos are considered to be motivating, too. For example, the large photo of the attorney and the tried person presents support which legal workers can offer to innocent people.
The last phrase of the author is also quite motivating – she promises security and defense for people in terms of law regulation.
List 2-3 improvements that would have enhanced this brochure:
A bit more information about the profession would be helpful.
Photos should be equal in size.
The layout could be more interesting.
Journalistic Essay
What did you learn about the leader under discussion in the journalistic essay – make sure that you list things that you did not know but are meaningful:
Gloria Rachel Allred has a very difficult life with much pain in her past.
She also worked as a high school English teacher in Philadelphia.
She was awarded many times for her effective work.
She has a child and grandchildren but no husband.
She believes that the most precious things cost sacrifice, self-discipline, and courage.
She was announced as one of the best attorneys in the USA by the President.
Frankly speaking, I have noticed a great difference between the essay with personal reflection and the journalistic essay. From the viewpoint of writing, I should say that the personal essay was written in a very good language, with good coherence and vivid images. On the other hand, the journalistic essay leaves much to be desired from the perspective of English grammar. There are many mistakes in sentence structure, which makes it impossible to understand the essence of the sentence. Moreover, the logic of the text needs reconsideration, too, since we can read about her daughter twice, the chronology of events is totally broken, and only the quotations and the information about her brilliant career are pleasant to read.
Gloria Rachel Allred can serve as a very good model for beginning lawyers and all the specialists in the sphere of law and justice. Her life story is very unusual and makes one sympathize with her at first, so many people would feel positive emotions towards her and some of them may even compare themselves with her. Moreover, her family and tragic events that have fallen to her lot show us that she is an ordinary person, just like anyone else. However, her bright graduation from universities with honor represents the importance of a good education for a career. Finally, her firm conviction in the idea to fight for her beliefs and never give up, no matter what others say, is the strongest motivational force in her personality. After reading her words, we can feel that she is a very self-confident person, who has control over her life and does what she considers right. I believe, it is a right model to follow.
