Benefits of Employee Evaluations
The introduction for this proposal is clear and clearly reveals the purpose of the entire project. The introduction, though short, actively engages the reader. The introduction clearly reveals the focus of the discussion, the benefits of implementing employee evaluations at Lowe’s organization. The main benefit is introduced as a way of capturing the interest of the reader. Such an introduction is important in capturing and maintaining the interest of the reader in the rest of the paper.
The paper has a clear sense of focus from the beginning to the end of the paper. The problem is clearly stated at the introduction and developed throughout the paper. The problem being discussed, and the solution being proposed, can be easily understood from the document. This can be recognized without deep insights into the message of the paper, as it is very clear.
The solution, performing evaluations and implementing the results of the evaluations, is clearly identified and presented. The author goes further to present the benefits of implementing such a solution at the organization.
The proposal does not have adequate in-text citations. The author fails to accredit some information borrowed from outside sources to their authors. Most of the sections, such as the introduction, benefits, Brief History of Lowe’s, Educate Staff and Update Procedures and Policies, do not have citations. Although there are some citations, they are not adequate and not effectively integrated into the proposal.
There are various ways through which the author can improve the paper. The organisation of the paper is one of this ways. The body of the paper particularly, requires a change in the use of headings. The author can use the level 1, level 2 etc. to organize the headings and information. The author should also include adequate use of in-text citations using the correct referencing style such as APA.
The draft is not at least three-quarters of the finished researched proposal; it is only 1489 words. More words should be added to make the minimum of 2000 words. The paper is lacking on APA formatting, both in in-text and reference list. The author should ensure in-text referencing is adequate and effective. The overall organization of the proposal is also necessary.
The writer should look deeper into spelling, grammar and sentence construction in this document. It is also critical that the author looks at the flow of information in the entire paper. The arguments in this document fail to smoothly transition from one to the next. This should be improved.
The impact The Peter Principle on the Army hierarchy
The introduction for this draft is lacking and fails to engage the reader. This is because the author fails to clearly state the purpose of the project in the introduction. The introduction is poorly organized from the beginning to the end. Up to the end of the introduction, the reader cannot get the actual focus of the author.
A clear sense of purpose is evident in the paper. The problem being focused on in the paper is clear, the incompetent leadership at the army, identified. The problem is clear and easy to understand, and so is the proposed solution, re-evaluation of the structure and changes to make it more effective. This makes it possible for the reader to capture the overall purpose of the discussion.
After presenting the problem, the author is clear about the solution, change in the army structure from the current one to make it more effective. On reading the paper, it is impossible to miss out on this solution that is identified to address the identified problem with the army hierarchy.
The proposal has extensive and effective use of in-text citations. The author has accredited most of the information from outside sources to their authors. However, it is not clear what referencing style the author is using. For instance, in in-text citations, the author does not use the surname and date or page numbers. In some cases, the author has used all the names of the author (such as Laurence J. Peter stated (1969)) and some have the initial of the author included (such as Tice T. , 2011). This shows a lack of understanding in referencing.
The proposal contains a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes that should be addressed to make the proposal better. While the author has adequate in-text citations and references, the paper will be better if a particular referencing style is used, such as APA. The paper can also do with better organization using the level 1, level 2 etc style.
This paper should be documented in a better way using the APA formatting. While the reference list uses the APA requirements, the in-text citations clearly fail to use the APA requirements for in-text referencing. The organization of the entire proposal should also be improved according to APA formatting.
The writer should look deeper into spelling, grammar and sentence construction in this document. It is also critical that the author looks at the flow of information in the entire paper. The arguments in this document fail to smoothly transition from one to the next. This should be improved. The overall organization of the paper should be improved.
