Part 1: General Response
1). Thesis/Claim:
The claim in this paper is: “This paper is going to analyze both of these movies on their own excellence based on reviews and superiority in comparisons with each other and lastly since they have quite the same genres, similar criticisms of them”. It is evaluative, interesting and arguable and it is written well because the writer does everything that they mention in the claim. There is a comparison between these two films regarding the reviews and criticism, which is what makes the claim evaluative. It is focused enough because everything that is mentioned is examined throughout the paper.
2). Criteria/Warrants & Backing:
The criteria is spread throughout the paper and mentioned in the claim. It is based on the critics and their evaluation of the films and on the writer’s own evaluation. The criteria is present because the writer evaluates the films based on specific qualities and on specific people’s opinions. It is included and defended in the best possible way because the films are evaluated separately and compared to each other.
3). Reasons & Support: The reasons prove the claim because the writer’s approach is unbiased as they include all the perspectives. Both films are analyzed correctly and the plot of each is evaluated as well. They are compared and the writer quotes the critics who evaluated the film as well. The reasons are effective because they help the writer make the point which is established in the claim.
4.) Use of Sources:
The requirements have been met and the sources are credible and mentioned. There are in-text citations but they are not properly cited and there is no Works Cited page. The quotes are “integrated as they should be because the writer relies on them to prove the claim. The writer mentions each critic by the name and puts in quotation marks what they have said which helps support the thesis.
Part 2: Working with Paragraphs and Sentences
1). Title:
The differences between “Side Effects” and “Gone Girl”
2). Verbs:
1. to be – to exist
2. to judge – to evaluate
3. to come to – to reach
4. to have – to possess
5. to mention – to suggest
3). Worst Paragraph:
“Criticizers concern in both of above named movies sometimes goes beyond the surface. From feminism perspective some argue that the main character is illustrating a woman who gets disappointment from ups and downs of life and becomes insane and destroys other people’s lives. They further claim that crime and psychotic behavior has roots in a woman’s disappointment. I personally defend the women right. However, in this case it could be any gender not just a female. Sometimes from feminism perspective things become bold without actually being vivid. Men might have argued in tons of other movies why the psycho character was a man; they have never done, since masculism does not exist”. This paragraph needs to be improved because it lacks a role in relation to the essay’s overall purpose. The grammatical errors need to be fixed as well and it should be integrated in the essay in a better way by connecting it to the other parts of the essay.
4). Two transitions:
“What I mean by that is everything is dependent to emotions and no one can judge emotion, while thriller would be tough to make since it’s all about logic. It must make sense. We don’t question feelings, but we question ratiocination.”
What I mean is that everything is dependent on emotions and no one can evaluate them, while thriller is tough to make since it involves logic and must make sense. Moreover, people do not question feelings, but reasoning.
“The film begins with presenting a cheerful marriage of Amy and Nick. Nick is a New-York times journalist who recently jobbed out by economy.”
The film begins with depicting a happy marriage of Amy and Nick, who is a New York Times journalist who recently lost a job because of the recession.
5). Three sentences (not part of “worst paragraph”):
1. “On their fifth anniversary Nick comes home and finds a scene of her wife being kidnapped.” (p. 1-2)
One their fifth anniversary, Nick comes home where he witnesses his wife being kidnapped.
2. “After police investigation, they come to consensus of him being the murderer of her wife.”
After they have finished the investigation, the police come to the conclusion that Nick murdered his wife.
3. “After vicissitudes the couple have encountered the story surcease by Amy finding her way back home to his husband after killing her ex-boyfriend and pretending that he kidnapped her.”
When the hard times pass, the couple is reunited when Amy comes home to her husband after killing her ex-boyfriend and pretending that he had kidnapped her.
6). Finally, give the essay a grade according to the rubric below.
Quality of introduction: 25; Quality of arguments: 48; Paragraphs and transitions: 21; Sentence level writing: 15
