IMPORTANCE OF SEX EDUCATION IN SCHOOLS
Thomas Edison State College
The effectiveness of sex education
Sex education provided in sample schools was effective in reducing the risks of premarital pregnancies in the schools that were experimented. This sharp reduction was directly proportional to not only the rate of transmission of STIs but also the actual levels of sexual intercourse among teenagers. Research has shown that there is favorable and positive perception about abstinence from sex education among children due to fear of unwanted pregnancies (Herrman 12). Thus, the biggest challenge of the negative attitude and concerns of most parents who perceive and believe that their children are exposed to irrelevant information have been discredited by the results showing that sex education has a positive impact on the behavior-change of the children in general.
Easy access to unreliable information
Many children do not have any information about sex from their parents as the discussions over the subject between the parents and their children are rare. Most of these children are left to search, on their own, for sex education information. The likely sources are from misleading forums such as commercial websites and magazines which encourage irresponsible sex. The media, for instance rarely exposes the dangers and consequences of immorality. Instead, they focus on uncensored advertisements that are irrelevant to the young children. Most Internet sources do not have a system to censor the information. These websites are, therefore, available to everyone irrespective of their age. The information contained is not necessarily verified as authentic or true and hence not reliable. With fast access to the Internet using several gadgets such as hand-held smart phones, the children readily and easily access unreliable information on sex. As a result, there is much misconception about sex, its benefits and consequences. Introduction of sex education in the schools’ curriculum is, therefore, a vital tool which would not only help to close the information gap and clarify, but also provide reliable and dependable information to children. Such reliable information will be helpful to them through to their adulthood.
The importance of Abstinence
Educating children on sexual issues will also go a long way in helping to instill the character of abstaining from sex, which is the most advocated method of protection from risks associated with sex. The argument supported by advocates of abstinence is that the participants need to commence the process of sex education while in early stages in school. Abstinence from sex should be the principle theme in the initial phase which addresses early-age students (Fentahun 21). According to Fentahun in his journal; Parents' Perception, Students' and Teachers' Attitude towards School Sex Education, the approach of teaching the subject to students at all stages in school should be involving, friendly and fun-filled. It is because teenagers easily get defensive when corrected hence the need to make the lessons fun-filled and if possible informal. When the students have graduated to advanced classes, they may be taught on the other issues and details such as the use of contraceptives to prevent unwanted pregnancies and the contradiction of sexually transmitted diseases in addition to abstinence. The children should also be informed on the risks and consequences associated with irresponsible sex such as the cost of teenage pregnancies, raising a child, treatment costs of STI’s and dangers of contradiction of HIV/AIDs which do not have any cure (Fentahun 2). Teenage pregnancies can not only lead to dropping out of school and stigmatization by peers but also may be marred with complications that may have long term adverse effects on the pregnant girl. Some children may stop indulging in sex because they fear the strings of HIV/AIDs, others the cost of unwanted pregnancies and others because they love and respect themselves and their partners. Whichever reason they choose, when they are offered information on all these factors, they will be safe from the dangers of irresponsible, unplanned sex and by adopting precaution measures, the rate of transmission of STIs and unwanted pregnancies will be minimized in children.
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