Introduction
This generation, unlike the previous ones is experiencing a lot of sudden encounters that have been contributed to by various factors, including industrialization and globalization, which are associated with numerous problems including economic catastrophes among others. This means that they have to find out ways of coping with these new happenings so as to survive and fulfill their desires. It is in this case that the necessity for guidance and assistance arises.
In the old generation, people lived in a closed society where few individuals were entitled with the responsibility of ensuring order and set morals were followed. The young generation, however is living in a disintegrated society where the world has become one global village. This has seen cultures exchanging morals as well as others having no respect for morals anymore. This has brought up new roles and responsibilities for the various age groups in addition to various perspectives. These changes have had a drastic effect on the young generation since, being the first to experience these changes, the young generation can only live in the best way possible known to them.
In dealing with all the happenings that are associated with this young generation, what matters the most for an individual is to realize one’s own self as well as one’s desires and ambitions. Without realizing yourself, it would every easy for you to be swayed by every wave of events that comes your way.
Knowing oneself gives the individual an anchor in case of any situation no matter its intensity. It is also through this that one can decide on whether or not to keep the set morals or come up with ones that suit their lifestyle. Additionally, this self-realization gives one a sense of consolation and belief in oneself even when things get tough. The self-realization achievement varies with different individuals all over the world and may be contributed to by one’s way socialization among other factors.
Conclusion
It would, therefore, do good for an individual living in this young generation to take up the advice so as to survive and prosper in this challenging world. They will receive several advices but without having an idea of who they really are and what they want in life, they will always be swayed by the numerous incidences associated with this new world.
Evaluation and Comments
This paper is well organized, and the grammar and sentence construction used are easy to understand, although there are a few places where the paper could be improved. Although there are some minor issues of word choice, spelling, and punctuation, these are not a big problem. I would grade this paper as a 3 overall.
Ideas & Content
My grade for this section is 2. In general terms, the purpose and the main idea are good. However, they are too simplistic, and there are a lack of supporting details. By choosing specific examples of morals in the global village, and specific examples of realizing one's own self and goals, the arguments would be much more convincing.
Organization
My grade for this section is 4. The paper is well-organized, with clear paragraphs that each make their own argument. Mentioning what your advice is in your introduction would be a good step.
Word Choice
My grade for this section is 3. You use a good variety of words, but your phrasing is a little off in some places. As an example, the word "good" which is highlighted above should be "well" instead. To "do good" means to do a good deed, while "to do well" means to benefit from something.
Sentence Fluency
My grade in this area is 3. Putting the subject, then the verb, then the object, often leads to more natural sounding sentences. For example, you could rewrite the sentence highlighted in red above as "Individuals across the world achieve self-realization in many different ways. Socialization and other factors all play important roles."
Conventions
My grade for this section is 3. You seem to have a good grasp of punctuation, although the paper needs some editing. When using commas to set off a clause, make sure to put a comma on each end, not just at the beginning. For example, the sentence "This generation, unlike the previous ones is experiencing" needs another comma after "ones."
