Peer Review Worksheet #2
Still hungry in America
Summary
The main issue is about starvation in most countries. The author focuses starvation in America and recommends ways in which this phenomenon can be eradicated. The article gives a brief overview of how this issue has been given attention by many leaders of the world. The article strives to make starvation to be a global problem and not confined to the United States alone. This is a global problem. The article also focuses on the effort that have been done by both the state and non-governmental sector in the quest to solve his problem. The author brings about the extent in which starvation has been experienced by most people in the world. The United States is still experiencing this problem and yet it is considered to be advanced and well developed. The author uses America to espouse the situation in poor countries. This is a comparison which strives to show that if the United States is facing starvation, then this could be worse in other countries.
Successes
The article is successful in bringing out the theme of the article. The author brings out the issue that are faced by many countries and what should be done to eradicate the menace. It is clear to the readers that the main issue that is of concern to the author is starvation. The author is also successful in mentioning the historical perspective of this problem. This helps the readers understand how the problem has been in existence and has not been fully eradicated.
Another success of the text is that it brings out clear strides of what have been done so far. This shows what the state and the non-governmental societies have done to ensure that this is eliminated. The effort done is clear from the text. The author succeeds in showing chronological events that have been done in this context. This is shown in the way the author brings out the strides that have been made by various regimes. It is clear to the readers the extent and the degree which the problem is seen. This is a good strategy in order to make readers understand the theme of a given text.
Suggestions
The text is lacking in the way the points are put across. The author is not objective in the analysis. The reader struggles to get the pieces of the text. The author moves from the beginning to the end without any plan and, thus, confuses the reader. The suggestion that I can make in this aspect is that the author should be clear and objective when bringing points. It is not clear where the start and end of the text is located. This should not be the case when undertaking this text.
Another suggestion is that the author should not use only data when analyzing the convincing strategy. It does not have to use data to analyze the convincing strategy that has been used. In this case, the author should have strived to get the tone of the writing. The strategy that is being used in the article is that of pathos. The author is striving to have some pathos in the text. This is because of the emotions and suffering that those starving undergo. The author should make use of other options to get the convincing strategy.
Superman and Me
Summary
This article is about the Indian culture and their take on reading or success. The article also points out the author of the “Superman and Me”. Alexie shares his experience of being in Indian environment where they are reservations concerning reading and success. The article focuses on the experience and effort that Alexie had to undergo in order to achieve his desires. The article further shows how the Indian education system was not able to promote learning and success among the students. How the original author attempted to demonstrate his main agenda is also described in the article. The first argument on the importance of being able to read has been demonstrated in the article. The author wants the readers to appreciate the importance of knowing how to read at an early age. The article clearly shows how the author used examples from personal experience to give an appeal to readers on the importance of ensuring that child should be able to read.
Successes
The first point about rhetoric analysis is to identify the author of the work. This article clearly tells us who is the author and what is his/her major role in the story. The article has demonstrated that the author is giving his own experience and the desires the writer had in his childhood. The article clearly gives a historical background of the settings in which the story is being written. The use of direct quote in this context has been very useful in the analysis in passing out the direct message from the author of the story. This gives a feeling of the tone, mood and intentions of the writer to the readers. Direct quotes have been used several times in the article, in the first instance, the author expresses his believe about the Indian writers on poetry, novels and other literature. The second quote is used to demonstrate the issues that a particular community is facing due to lack of reading ability. Understanding words is what the article is trying to point out which is the main goal of the article. It is therefore a success in the perspective that readers are not only able to read what the author understood and interpreted but the words of the original author of the story himself.
Another key success in the article is a demonstration of how unable to read is a big challenge was brought out in the story. The author clearly used examples comparing his reading status to those of others at the same level in term of age. The use imagery where the author demonstrate how in kindergarten he was able to read a more complex story while others cannot read a single line from a much simplified story book of “Dick and Jane”. The author further demonstrated the poor situation and efforts done by the teachers or administrators on issues of learning. This shown by the statement “I do not remembervisited the reservation” there were no guest teachers in an effort to empower reading knowledge to the children.
The articles have clearly demonstrated the rhetorical strategies used by the author to deliver his message of appeal to the readers. The article further shows how an individual effort can impact on the life of a child. The plight of the Indian children has been clearly analyzed and presented in the story in chronological manners.
Suggestions
Superman and me (2)
Summary
This article is about the “Superman and Me” which about literacy among Indian children. The article focuses on the experience and effort that Alexie had to undergo in order to achieve his desires. The article further shows how the Indian education system was not able to promote learning and success among the students. How the original author attempted to demonstrate his main agenda is also described in the article. The first argument on the importance of being able to read has been demonstrated in the article. The author wants the readers to appreciate the importance of knowing how to read at an early age. The article clearly shows how the author used examples from personal experience to give an appeal to readers on the importance of ensuring that child should be able to read.
Successes
The success of the article is also through the proper manner in which the author looked at the story. The author starts by showing us who is the writer and what he has achieved. Since the story is about an individual, the article analyzed the personal relationship of the author and his family. The demonstration of the struggle and strive that the writer and others of his age went through gives an appeal to the readers to act. The actions or the questions about what the writer has done about the situation have also been answered. It is a success because the appeal and the rhetoric strategy employed in the story has been explored.
Direct quotations are also better ways of giving the readers the tone and choice of word by the writer. The writer also identified the ethos and pathos appeals in the analysis.
Suggestions
The use of direct quotes should be referenced properly and interpret the circumstances under which the actor said or acted in a particular manner. The author should be able to identify the text and areas that he/she is going to analyze in the first paragraph.
