This is an improvement especially as far as citing your sources. However, you either did not read, understand, or follow the comments on your first draft. You were supposed to add quotations to your claims as well as examples of research to support your argument.
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Essentials of Psychology
Research project number 05020500
I have chosen to discuss the role that media violence plays in aggression in children, specifically as related to Albert Bandura’s experiments. I specifically chose this topic based on Bandura's observations with his famous Bobo doll study (which has been very influential ...