Review of the first draft
The topic of the paper is clear and succinct. However, the title page does not meet all the APA guidelines. There is no running head, and the work is not paginated. Your thesis does not seem to anchor well with the topic of the paper. You stated that you would make children know that someone cares about their education, yet this is just a part of the bigger picture. Philosophy of education does not target one stakeholder. Therefore, it is imperative that the thesis has no logical connection to rest of the work. I suggest that you focus on ...